Text rewrites
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the hero is full of accounting jargon — rewrite it so a non-accountant can grasp it in 3 seconds
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the testimonials section feels generic — write 3 specific quotes that mention dollar savings or hours saved
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every paragraph is the same length — vary it: one-liner, medium, longer for emphasis
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the about section is third-person — switch to first-person plural for warmth
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the services list uses 'we' too often — vary openings, use action verbs
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the hero is too long — cut it to a single 6-word phrase
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add an em-dash to break up the hero subhead more rhythmically
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the about section uses 'we' too much — rewrite using 'the cafe' instead
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all the section copy is in present tense — rewrite the about in past tense (origin story)
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the CTA says 'Visit us' — make it more specific, like 'See you at 6:30am'
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the about section uses 'we' too much — write one paragraph in a regular customer's voice
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rewrite the hero so a passerby on Hunter St gets it in 1.5 seconds
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the about section is cold — make it warmer and emphasise our long-term patient relationships
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the services use clinical terms — translate every one to plain English (root canal, cleaning, whitening)
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the testimonials sound corporate — rewrite as if friends recommending us
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the about section is doctor-bio style — soften into 'meet your team' warmer voice
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the about section is technical — make it accessible to a first-time homeowner
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the services are listed but not explained — add 1-2 lines per service
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the about copy is too marketing-y — write like a friend telling you about a place they love
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rewrite the about as a love letter to the area — what makes Wollombi special
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every room description follows the same template — vary the rhythm, lead with what's distinctive
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rewrite the hero as a single short sentence + a phone number — that's it
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the services copy is generic — name every type of job we handle with one-line context
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the about section is stiff — make it sound like one tradie introducing his crew
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the hero is wordy — strip to a single sentence + the phone number
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replace every 'we provide' with an action verb that signals urgency
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shift every CTA from 'Book Now' to softer 'Tell me about your day'
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the about section is professional bio — add 1 personal sentence (favourite shoot ever, why this work matters)
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the about section is generic — anchor it to a specific moment that shaped the photographer's style
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the portfolio captions read like file names — write narrative captions for each shot
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replace 'photographer' with 'storyteller' throughout
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the contact section asks for too much info upfront — pare to name + date + 1 line
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the hero is intimidating for beginners — soften to 'first time? perfect.'
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rewrite each class description in the teacher's voice — first-person, what to expect